My oars he used to be
with him pulling me
through the prattling brook that defined me
We used to meet
somewhere along the way..
Our flow in unison
What an inseparable motion we used to be!
Now the lull that he has become
no more oars he can provide
I am left floating alone
wondering if there is any respite…
P.S. I recently used this image on my poem Healing Rain but I felt it went very well with this one too.
©NYM
Goodbyes are hardest for the purest Love.I am so so so glad this is just an imagination.Touchwood!
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I’m glad too. It would be unbearable.
Thanks so much 🌺
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The image goes so well with your poem. Goodbyes under such circumstance would terrify my heart and soul. The last line is the most soulful despair of letting go. I find in such emotional moments that it is the truest love that causes one to mourn a loss so deeply.
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I agree with you, it would be terrifying. And I wouldn’t want to even think about it. I don’t, as a matter of fact. However, it was Andrew’s creative writing this morning that prodded me to come up with some sort of a response.
Thanks so much for reading and taking the time to share your beautiful thoughts.
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Kya hua? Hope thing’s are fine. 😊🤗
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Yo! Maine footnote baad me pada. 😂😹
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Lol. Saves me the trouble of dispelling my sweet friend’s misplaced worry. 😀😀
You’re so sweet. Thanks re
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🤗
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🤗🤗💐
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Beautifully, sad. ☺❤
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Thank you Amanda. I appreciate the read and your words 😊❤️
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You are Welcome. ☺
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Really wonderful poem Nandita
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Thank you Ben. Really appreciate you taking the time to leave your words.
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There is strength in imagining parting, as almost a way to test the ropes binding the hearts. I’m glad this is only “what if.” Now – here – do this one. (a dare) What if you both lived forever, and could live together through eternity? What would you want to do most of all (beyond the obvious). 😉 ♥.
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Hi Niki..just got in (home).
I love your dare. I’m sooo gonna do it. And also, your thoughts are so appreciated. Love your comment.
Yet to leave my comment on your post. ❤️😊
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Cool. =) I’m glad you like it. No rush re my blog. Take your time. I nailed it to the site so it should stick around a bit. xo ♥.
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you have a good imagination, I think also good-bys of someone you love is horrible…luckyly only imagination….
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A writer should have a good imagination, no? Thanks Anie. Always a pleasure hearing from you
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No question I knew this, but I think mice things can be said more often as necessary….
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This is very sad, but it is also so amazing how you made it rhyme so smoothly, and in a different style than a standard poem. It was just like being in water. Also I could picture you saying it, and that made it even more beautiful.
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What an incredible response. Poignant and hauntingly beautiful. As always your finale is sheer perfection. But this time I have to tell you I loved that first stanza. The metaphor of the oars was wonderful. But I think the best lines were:”we used to meet, somewhere along the way….” That line depicts sadness, longing, nostaglia…..and everything I would feel if you ever stopped loving me.
Bravo Love. This was beyond words. xoxoxo
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I love surprising you, pleasantly of course. And the fact is, you inspire me. So happy you loved it so much. Your praise is my dynamite, just like your love is my kryptonite. Hey that rhymed. Lol.
I love you. xoxo
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LOL Funny, we took the same concept, the loss of love. Mine was haunting your so beautifully painful. Really loved this piece. I will continue trying to be your oar. I love you. xoxo
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Tum na please acha acha hi likha kro.😒 I mean positive and love wala.🌸
This was heart wrenching but beautiful.💖💖💖
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Likha na abhi Naya post 😁💕
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Shukriya Mohtarma. Aapki hasi barkarar rahei.. aap aabad rahei, khush rahei. Aur hasti rahei. Bas ab so ja.😁😂
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Aur yehi duwa apke liye bhi 😀💕
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Acha chalti hun duayon mei yaad rakhna😂🍇🍎🍑🍊🍈🍍😘 eat healthy re. Earphones lagale ab..😂
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Hahaha. Paagal aurat!! 😁😜😅😂
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Yo. So ja ab 😎😎
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So touching
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Happy you felt so. Thank you so much
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You feel your life would be idle without him, so romantic. To feel you can’t move without someone is just a bond so strong that even the strongest winds can’t budge unless you know your other half is there. This was lovely, your boat should never float alone with how your oar feels. Great write Nandrewdita!😉
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I bow to thee, for thy reading prowess.
🌹🌹😀
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Not before I bow to you your grace. 🌹🌹😉
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Wow,it doesn’t needs any comment..it is worth more than that
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That’s a lovely comment. So glad. Thank you Rashmi
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Great, it must be hard for you to let the sad thought enter your mind. Your poem reflects the pain.
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Yes, this was a purely imagined piece, inspired by Andrew’s similar one.
Thanks Jaya
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You are welcomed 🙃
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Wow. What a beautiful creation ❤️
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I love ‘wows’. 😂 Thanks so much.
Gotta catch up on your posts
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You deserve all wows. No worries at your leisure 😊
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